Wednesday, March 23, 2005

The Unreliable Third

Comments and conversation about this exercise.

Unreliable Third.
Write a fragment of a story from the PoV of an unreliable narrator—third-person limited (or attached) narration. This is a deliberate misuse of the more objective third-person narration. What makes a writer choose first person over third person in a story? Usually, an unreliable or naïve narration is spoken, in the first-person voice of the untrustworthy narrator. What happens when you give us a slightly detached, yet still unreliable narration? This means that we will hear the thoughts of this character and see what this character tells us to see. Sindra smelled smoke, so she pulled the fire alarm. What if we find out later that Sindra had not smelled any smoke?

500 words.


Blogger Sharron said...

Ok, I'll go first.

His House (Unreliable Third)

The house looks great. He has had so many plans, big plans, for so long. He is thrilled to see it all falling into place. The kitchen is just the way she always wanted it. It was never big enough. Never had enough counter space. Or cabinets. It’s so much bigger now. Top notch too. Cherry cabinets, hand rubbed. Travertine floors, rugged and pleasing. Granite counter tops, hard and sturdy. The appliances, new. Look at that oven. He can almost smell the hot, sweet aroma filling the kitchen. Chocolate cake. His favorite. She is such a good cook. She spoils him. She must have bought new pots. They are hanging from the new rack, like broken tree branches.

The den is almost perfect. The wormy maple walls, the natural stone fireplace, the big screen TV. Ah the smell of burnt logs. Pungent but comforting. He remembers that smell from childhood. There’s not near enough seating for their big family though. He knows the old furniture was worn, but this stuff is too small. It doesn’t even look comfortable. The old couch was broken in nicely, even if it didn’t look like much. And they need to bring the board games up from the basement. It will be nice to hang out in this cozy room. The basement was always so damp. He needs to figure out where she put his side table. He knows she hates it. But it’s his favorite, wobbly legs, scratches and all. He’s a little hurt she didn’t put it in here. He can see she has finally framed the old family pictures. She always said she wanted to do that. They must be of her family he hasn’t met yet. You’d think after all these years they would have made the trip to England to visit her home place. Money has always been so tight.

The smell of fresh paint. Some don’t like it. He thinks it smells wonderful, new. It’s the perfect shade of blue. His son will like that. The walls were white before. Dingy and scuffed. The hole behind the door, round, knob-shaped is gone. He always meant to put a door stop there. He can’t believe the bunk beds are back though. He thought they got rid of those two years ago. They must have been in the basement. His son can’t be happy with that. Or the teddy bears resting on the pillows. After all, he’s in middle school now. Bunk beds are a little young for him. She doesn’t want him to grow up. He needs to talk to her about that.
His cell phone is ringing again. His sister. She keeps calling. She’s so upset. She keeps telling him he doesn’t belong here. Says she’s coming to get him. Doesn’t belong here? This is his house. His home. He doesn’t know what she is talking about. He’s worried about her. She hasn’t been acting right lately. Keeps telling him things that aren’t true. Very strange. She’s not well.

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88% are satisfied with their choice � but 16% said they would get a better quality one next time; while 9% would opt for something firmer; 5% said they would choose a softer bed and 4% wanted a bigger one.

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Proper care will keep your bed in good condition. Always read and retain manufacturers care instructions and ask your retailer for advice, too. Otherwise, the following tips will help you to get the best out of your bed during its natural life.
Use a washable, protective cover to protect the mattress (and pillows) from stains. Barrier fabrics for allergy sufferers are also available.
In the mornings, throw back the bed clothes and leave the bed to air for 20 minutes to allow body moisture to evaporate.
Turning your mattress over from side and side and end to end every few months (every week for the first three months) helps upholstery fillings to settle down more evenly. Some more luxurious mattresses, with much thicker layers of fillings designed to mould themselves to the contours of your body, may retain signs of these impressions, despite turning.
Don�t make a habit of sitting on the edge of the bed and don�t let the kids bounce on it.
Don�t roll up or squash a mattress to store or transport it - this can cause permanent damage.
Handles are designed to help you position a mattress on its base - do not use them to support the full weight of the mattress - they may pull out and damage the fabric.
Don�t leave polythene wrappings on a new mattress - dampness, mildew and rotting could all result from a build-up of condensation.
Vacuum your mattress and base from time to time to remove fluff and dust. This should be carefully done so as not to dislodge fillings or damage tufts. Open windows while vacuuming -especially if there is an asthma sufferer in the house.
When tackling stains, use mild detergent and warm or cold water. Never over soak a mattress or base.
Putting a new mattress on a base for which it was not intended, a new mattress on an old base or a board between the mattress and base can impede comfort and reduce the useful life of the mattress - as well as affecting any guarantees or warranties.
Out with the Old: Once you�ve bough yourself a new bed, make arrangements to have the old one disposed of (many retailers will do this for you). Don�t give it to the children, relatives, guests or neighbours. If it wasn�t good enough for you, it�s not good enough for anyone else, either. In fact, it�s a veritable health hazard - get rid of it
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